Creative Paragraphs- Man In Space

This week we have been learning to rework our writing to make our paragraphs interesting for our audience. We started by writing a creative sentence about this picture. As a class we will choose Nate's sentence because we liked it the best and wrote a paragraph each to follow the chosen sentence. Here is the beginning of my story that starts with Nate's sentence.

A spaceman bravely walks out into the icy milkyway protected by his suit. It has pipes that give him air to breathe and keep him warm. He won’t be cold out there as long as his suit doesn’t come off.

He a suit that doesn’t